One of my biggest dreams in my life is going to Europe to visit many countries. Firstly, I will go to French because French is the most beautiful country that I ever know. If I will be there, I don’t forget to see an Eiffel Tower, for that is a characteristic of French. Then, the second country that I am going to is Spain. My reason why I choose Spain is I want to see a historical building since the building is very wonderful ,for example: Old Town of Avila, Alhambra, Mezquita and many else.England is The third country that I want to visit.Champion football league is my reason why I want to go there.I wish that I can see my favourite football team “Manchester United”. For that reason I will try to realize my biggest dream next time.
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Don't 4get the merchandises if ur dream of going there come true:-).
BalasHapusIt's interesting and well developed paragraph for sure. However, u have to elaborate ur supporting sentences more. Take a look at ur title dear. Please avoid to use 2 same pronouns. U can write "My biggest dream in life/ in this life". Mind ur grammar, choice of words as well as the punctuation. It's essential to avoid run-on sentence.